Lady Sydney

I'm reading The Sweet Far Thing by Libba Bray. It's the third book in her trilogy, starting with A Great and Terrible Beauty . ^_^ So far, it's fantastic!

Eep! :shock: That's a bit overwhelming! You need to space your paragraphs, or else it makes your piece look sloppy and it turns off your readers. Space them out, and ...

That's really sweet for the guy, but your other readers would get rather bored. Where's your description? We want to feel the same passion that you do, but you've got ...

Seems more like this should be in a letter to said friend, rather than in the Poetry forum. :wink: You're telling us about your friend and explaining that she complains. ...

That was lovely, although I think it could have been better had you added more description. Why should your readers care about Jake being your perfect guy? Give us some ...

You kinda threw me off with the repetition of "Is like fine grains of sand", but it seemed pretty good besides that. I liked it! ^_^ ~*Sydney*~

Lol. Cute and simple. :wink: I like it.

Welcome to the site, nature! ^_^ Nice to see a new member joining our big writing family. I'm Sydney; if you have any questions, you may PM me at any ...

This seemed pretty good, but you might want to add in some punctuation and break it up into stanzas. I liked the flow and content, but it could use a ...

Every body trips and has times where they fall. And are so worthy but feel[s]s[/s] so small. Sometimes it's so hard to live stable and stay on track . And ...

This is a little late, but oh well. Welcome to the site, Angel! I'm Sydney. :) If you have any questions or are confused about what's what, feel free to ...

Wow. :shock: You did a wonderful job on this! There's no need for me to echo what's already been said about the microphone, so I won't. It amazes me how ...

Banned for having nine letters in your username.

I'm... not sure I know what's going on. :? That could just be me, though. lol You had some nice description in there and I could follow your rhythm. I ...

That was an interesting little intro. ^_^ I'm not use to seeing things like that in this forum. :) Welcome to the site! I'm Sydney, though you may already know ...